In a prepared statement for release Tuesday, the institute contends research shows "that licensing at later ages would substantially reduce crashes involving teen drivers." The example the institute uses most prominently is New Jersey, the only state with a minimum driver's license age of 17. The report cited a study from 1992-96 in which the rate of crash-related deaths among 16- and 17-year-olds was 18 per 100,000 in New Jersey, compared with 26 per 100,000 in Connecticut, which had a minimum driver's license age of 16 and 4 months. Neither New Jersey nor Connecticut had graduated licensing laws at the time of the study. The report also showed that the New Jersey fatality rate fell significantly for teens after a graduated licensing law was enacted. Among the state's 17-year-old drivers, the percentage in fatal crashes dropped 33 percent after the law was enacted.
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The reason why I chose this paragraph is because it has all the elements need to make a good paragraph because of TIEE. (Topic sentence-Intro to evidence-Evidence-Elaborate). The topic sentence is 'In a prepared statement for release Tuesday, the institute contends research shows "that licensing at later ages would substantially reduce crashes involving teen drivers."' The reason why this is a good topic sentence is because it introduces what the paragraph is about. The intro to evidence is 'The example the institute uses most prominently is New Jersey, the only state with a minimum driver's license age of 17.' the reason why this is a good intro to evidence part is because it introduces the evidence talking about New Jersey and their policy and age limit for teen drivers and saying why it's a good idea to make the minimum age 17 instead of 16.. The evidence is 'The report cited a study from 1992-96 in which the rate of crash-related deaths among 16- and 17-year-olds was 18 per 100,000 in New Jersey, compared with 26 per 100,000 in Connecticut, which had a minimum driver's license age of 16 and 4 months.' The reason why this is the evidence is because it shows why raising the minimum age for drivers is the right thing to do. The elaboration is 'Among the state's 17-year-old drivers, the percentage in fatal crashes dropped 33 percent after the law was enacted.' The reason why this is the elaboration is because it shows the outcome of what they decided to do. That all is what makes a good paragraph.